Question #N866
A writer wants to revise a sentence from their draft: "The author’s use of figurative language, it helps to make the story more vivid and engaging." Which choice best revises the sentence to improve its clarity and conciseness?
Which choice best revises the sentence to improve its clarity and conciseness?
A. The author’s use of figurative language helps make the story more vivid and engaging.
B. The author’s use of figurative language, it helps to make the story more vivid and engaging.
C. Figurative language, it helps the author to make the story more vivid and engaging.
D. The author’s use of figurative language, it helps the story to become more vivid and engaging.
Correct Answer is: A
Choice A is the best answer. It eliminates the unnecessary comma and the pronoun "it" by combining the phrase "it helps to make" into a single verb, "helps make." The other choices all contain errors in punctuation or word choice.