Question #N996
The following text is from a novel about a young woman who is trying to find her place in the world. "I want to be more than just a pretty face, but I don’t know how to do that. I feel like I’m stuck in a rut. I’m not sure what I’m good at, or what I’m meant to be. But I’m not going to give up. I’m going to keep searching until I find my way."
Which of the following changes to the text would improve its clarity and conciseness?
A. Change "I want to be more than just a pretty face" to "I want to be more than a pretty face."
B. Change "I’m not going to give up" to "I won’t give up."
C. Remove the sentence "I’m not sure what I’m good at, or what I’m meant to be."
D. Change "I’m going to keep searching until I find my way" to "I’ll keep searching until I find my way."
Correct Answer is: B
Choice B improves the clarity and conciseness of the text by replacing the informal contraction "I’m" with the more formal and concise "I won’t." The other choices do not improve the clarity or conciseness of the text.